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There had been talk about a "Raja Kumari" travelling to city after city, helping people in need wherever necessary. This Raja was gradually becoming known throughout the country. One day, Raja Kumari arrived in Nila city and saw an old woman weeping about the death of her sons. She explained how they were killed by a pack of giants who come to the city once a week to take a sort of tribute from them. Each week the giants would take something else - a house, a buffalo, a villager, loaves of bread, etc. By now, the giants had taken six of the woman's seven sons. She was terrified that they would take her last son away from her. Raja Kumari consoled the woman and reassured her that no harm would come to her only remaining son.
"But how?" The old woman asked. "The giants can pick whomever they want."
"I will go to the giants' dwelling myself and volunteer myself ," replied Raja Kumari.
The next day, Raja Kumari elegantly adorned in heavy armor with a shining sword, went to visit the giants. As the horse approached the giants' cave, the guards became alert. They questioned why the stranger had arrived in their land, not believing that this was Raja Kumari. With a quick slash of a sharp sword, Raja Kumari sliced off the arm of one of the giants. Terrified and taken aback, they rushed inside the cave to alert the other giants. The ground suddenly trembled with their hurried footsteps, and dust from the ground rose up in their midst. When the air cleared, the giants were surprised to see the new arrival to their land, for it was a woman.
"Come forth, for I am Raja Kumari, born enemy of the giants!"
Silence. Then, laughter. The giants were both surprised and amused.
"You can't be Raja Kumari, young lady," one of the giants finally stated. "Raja Kumari is a mighty soldier, known for defeating his enemies in every city he crosses! You look like the many villagers and kids I have eaten."
Raja Kumari said nothing, but instead brandished her sword and took aim at the giant who spoke to her in such a condescending manner. With a single movement of her right arm, she was able to pierce the giant's heart and kill him immediately.
The remaining giants now began to fear the girl, yet continued to deny the identity of Raja Kumari.
"We have eaten so many children that look just like you! You cannot be the Raja Kumari that the giants have come to fear so much. When the real Raja Kumari comes, his sword will pierce seven girdles placed one behind the other."
The giants haughtily assembled seven iron girdles one behind the other, then stood behind them as if it were a shield. Raja Kumari spun her sword above her head, and when she let go of it, it effortlessly pierced all seven girdles, as well as the giants.
"And that is what you get when you underestimate a woman's ability," said Raja Kumari, as she picked up her bloody sword from the ground.
The onlooking giants fled. They took refuge in a nearby cave, hoping that the mighty Raja Kumari would not venture into its dark corners to seek them out. Correct they were, as Raja Kumari resorted to having a statue made in her likeness to stand guard over its entrance.The giants were not a problem for the Nila City furthermore.
This is the story of how Raja Kumari Defeated the Giants.
Author's Note: I kept most of the details from the original story, but changed it to reflect a female perspective. In the Hindi language, Rajakumari means "princess." I decided to keep this name because it could also mean there was a Raja (king) named Kumari, which is the reason nobody knew that Raja Kumari was actually a woman. I kept the main plot details, such as the old woman losing her sons to giants, the Raja volunteering to take the last son's place, and the giants not believing that the person in front of them will soon kill them. I also kept some of the same dialogue because I enjoyed that part in the original story.
Mulan from the TV show, Once Upon a Time. Source
Bibliography: Flora Annie Steel, Tales of the Punjab, Source

Hey Lance,
ReplyDeleteI loved the way you kept things consistent with the original story but changed the main character to be female. Also your play on words with her name, Raja Kumari, was really creative. It is interesting how different cultures have similar stories. I read the China stories this week and ran into a similar one there. Beyond the story itself, the way you set it up kept it flowing well and kept me captivated. Overall, I really enjoyed it. Great job!
-Elyse
First off, thanks for sharing this story with us. I really appreciate how hard you worked to keep the feel and tone of the original story. Anytime we do an update or make a change, like you did switching the story to have a female main character, it’s easy to lose the old in pursuit of the new. I think you have a great balance between the original while still adding your own flare!
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- JD
Hi Lance,
ReplyDeleteI think you did an excellent job retelling this story! This is one that I didn't read, so it was really neat to get to read it from your perspective. I love the changes you made. I think that changing the name to Raja Kumari was such a clever little detail that worked so well with the story and enhanced it. I think it was also really neat how the story ended showing the Raja's cleverness, as well as her strength.
Hi Lance!
ReplyDeleteYour word choice really stood out to me in this one. I like the alliteration of "a quick slash of a sharp sword" - it gives the reader a really vivid image of what's going on. Also, I'm all about a gender swap in stories. I haven't read the original, but I imagine it features a badass Raja defeating giants, which is exactly what your protagonist did. Nice work!
Hey Lance,
ReplyDeleteThis was such a neat story to read! I really like how you mentioned the meaning of the name in your author's note as that is a very clever play on words to use. The fact that the giants underestimated her even after she killed one of them truly shows how little they valued a woman's ability to be strong and powerful. The fact that several of them lined up perfectly for her to kill was quite ironic which I appreciated. Great story overall!